Helen's+Dossier+Reviews

//**Biofuels**// - there was no opening/lead sentence; they jumped right into biofuels (no context or big picture) - lack of in-text citations on the first page seems iffy - clear and concise background information - very realistic analysis, good depiction of the pros and cons, and the consequences leading to one another (well thought-out) - well-written, paragraphs had a nice flow, good transitions - i like that they explained the logic behind their dossier (why they focused on ethanol production) - it was nice how they didnt keep everything confined to just canada as biofuels is not the most promising energy source here, but is quite feasible and should be considered in other countries such as Brazil - i feel that the 4th paragraph could have been broken up, considering the relative size of the other paragraphs in the dossier - the dossier and the lab correlated well - i enjoyed the statistics about the amount of land required to meet Canada's transportation fuel requirements; they provided a good idea of the environmental requirements and a good comparison to Brazil as well - agree with their conclusion, great, practical dossier although i thought they could have included more scientific content on biofuels themselves
 * GROUP S**

- again, no introductory sentence/paragraph - just something technical: i noticed the first four sentences all begin with "biofilms" or "a biofilm" while the next 5 or so sentences all begin with "algae" - nicely incorporated scientific content (photosynthesis, ATP, ETC process) - the environmental requirements were quite detailed and nicely thought-out - key terms and concepts were clearly explained - again, the conclusion was quite realistic, simple and backed with good reasoning
 * //Biofilms//**

//Water//** - a few grammatical errors, great introduction, very well-written in general - i wasnt completely sure of the big difference between types 1 and 2 for the categories of hydropower - could have explained the physics-y stuff and key terms //slightly// more in depth - i like the balance between basic info, stats, and environmental requirements - great descriptions of the processes of energy production - wonderful explanations of geographical conditions; i like that they explained them rather than just stating a list of requirements - it was nice that they focused more on the new and developing technologies associated with water energy - i felt the conclusion was quite practical and made sense; i agree with most of the points made
 * GROUP U

//**Wind**// - introduction and background information paragraphs were nicely constructed - wacko sentence: "From aviary fauna using the kinetic energy of the moving air for travel to flora depending on the stream of wind for reproductive purposes, wind is a useful resource for all organisms." - clear and simple explanation of the wind power equation was a nice addition; they got their point across and incorporated the math/science concept at the same time - generator turbine make-up and processes were well-explained - several grammar things, maybe some re-wording is needed in a few sentences - overall, well written, content presented in a logical and flowing fashion - i enjoyed the mention of the boy in Malawi; in general the conclusion was strong, however it could have been longer and included more scientific context rather than just the case study and inspirational thoughts

//Solar//** - positioning of a few paragraphs and sentences could be reconsidered - as well, some things could be reworded - general flow of the dossier could be slightly better, lack of transitions at some parts - chemistry/scientific aspects were in general quite well explained - some topics could have used a bit more info (eg: there were some unclear concepts in paragraph 9) - i liked the use of the tables to organize the data. however, im not sure if all of it was completely necessary - it was cool how they compared it to wind and nuclear energy; does a nice job in showing where solar power stands relative to the other potential energy sources - overall, fairly well written in terms of understanding the concepts and content
 * GROUP Y

//**Geothermal**// - introduction/background info was well-written and very informative - nice transitions, good flow; everything followed a logical process - basic information about geothermal energy sources was well put and explained - good use of pictures, helped me visualize the power plants and processes occurring inside them - environmental requirements were quite detailed yet clear and concise - conclusion was a little short, but i agree with it - overall, i thought the writing was slightly better than the solar dossier and represented and geothermal energy well